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Posy Churchgate's avatar

I agree with Keith, intensely immersive, all the anguish is there in a few words

Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you so much, Posy. I appreciate your kind comment!

Keith Long's avatar

Wow. I wouldn’t have thought you could get a reader emotionally invested in characters with so little information about them

JK Mill's avatar

Holy crap this was intense! Gripping flash fiction, amazing!

K.C. Knouse's avatar

This one put a lump in my throat. There are many forms of letting go in life, but this is the ultimate. In fact, in this instance, it is not really a letting go but rather a breaking away. She pried his hand open. Beautifully written with a moment of hope just before the end. This is one piece that will stay with me for a long time.

Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you so much, K.C.!

Tiffany S.'s avatar

I really enjoyed this piece!

Very tense.

EJ Trask's avatar

starting with the cliffhanger. i love it.

Liz Zimmers's avatar

Wrenching! I don’t think I breathed until the end.

Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

My job is done. Also, you're a master at that, too!

heather pratt's avatar

and that sacrifice is true love !

Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Sometimes not even love can save us.

Hanna Delaney's avatar

Falling is one of the ultimate nightmares.