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K.C. Knouse's avatar

The immediacy of the short sentences heighten the desperation to escape and the tension in the chase. It is always satisfying to end a piece by circling back to the beginning. Masterful job of writing, Michele.

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Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you, K.C. You're always so kind.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Yikes. That was tense stuff. Great job, Michele. - Jim

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Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you so much!

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Shawn Brooks's avatar

Short and packs a punch in it!

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Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you!

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Shawn Brooks's avatar

Of course!

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Colin Devonshire's avatar

Loved it, brilliant.

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Jared Lambert's avatar

My favorite bit is, "He’s a monster. How could I believe he ever loved me?"

For me, it made the narrator instantly relatable and added so much depth that I wanted to read more!

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

Brutal! ❤️

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Parker McCoy's avatar

This one definitely puts you right into the dark, brutal action. Impossible to look away from. Great post, Michele.

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JK Mill's avatar

Holy shit! So powerful. Beautifully written.

You never miss.

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Author Michele Bardsley's avatar

Thank you!

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